Developed my stairs piece further since my last post. I've now added in the inbetweens and also made various alterations to the animation and also the camera based on feedback from my class and also the feedback I got from Ed.
The feedback I got from Ed from the last video was:
"Nice work, Lauren. My only note is that you be very specific in your own mind about what it is that your character thinks he hears. You have him jerking around at one point on the stairs, and it seems to me that if I heard a ...suspicious noise upstairs, I would freeze, trying not to even breathe. Maybe he thinks the noise came from downstairs? Also, after he has made it to the top landing, I am not sure what he is doing when he flattens himself against the wall. Is he afraid there is a person in the house and that the person might see him?"
I'd already got feedback from my class about the ending where he slides along the wall recommending I alter it... I also thought it would be better to change it but part of me was kind of attached to it just because of how it looks visually... I loved the poses and movement! Sadly they just don't make sense in the context of the animation so I took them out :( I also made some other alterations here and there to the timing e.g sped up the slamming of the door at the end and started adding in my breakdowns/inbetweens. The plus side of making these tweaks is my animation is now 30 seconds long rather than over 40, which is great due to the time we have on the task.
We had a lecture focusing on camera work last week too, so based on what I learnt in that session I've also totally changed the cameras, which was a definite improvement! I took them all out and the animation now has only one camera which follows the character throughout the piece which was an instant improvement.
This was what I had initially based on everything I mentioned:
In the last few days I've developed it further. I further tweaked the camera to capture the character better as he climbs the stairs, as the angle in the video above didn't really show the poses at their best as he's climbing the stairs. They weren't reading well to the camera. I also adjusted it so it doesn't pull back then zoom in after he climbs the stairs which works much better. Another thing I tweaked was having the camera to stop moving when he glances behind his as well as when he's scared to give the impression that the camera is 'something' creeping behind him/watching him as he moves which works well with the mood I'm attempting to create.
I finished adding in my breakdowns too and altered the start of the animation to more of a sneak rather than just steps.
I made a proper render this time round to get a better idea of how the whole piece is looking with the lighting:
Overall I'm pleased with how it's developing.There's a few areas which I'm still not happy with... mainly the run from the top of the stairs to his room, it's not working for me yet. Not sure how to approach it.. may need to re-block it and go from there. Going to post this one up for feedback now and then delve into it some more.
I really need to block in some actions for his eyes and add in some sound effects too for the next pass.
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